Holy power (completed)

Name: Cruzado Protección (Crusader's Protection)

Looks: Kimino’s wing shine brightly like the heavens and then places a beautiful radiating sphere of light around her master Bara Kusabana.

Ability: The sphere of light protects Bara from bodily damage or at least if the attacker is extremely powerful, the attack will cause minor bodily damage compared to normal. The sphere lasts four posts.

Ascended Ability: Helios’s Grace
Effect: Solar and holy energies flare together creating an AoE(area of affect) wave of energy that eats at the soul a little, by draining reiatsu, if the target dies their soul get sent to Hueco Mundo and most likely will turn into a hollowfied form of their current self. Also after activation, Kimino’s body becomes pure light and increases the power of Kimino’s abilities by a little. Every parry creates a weak explosion of light that gives the opponent

Activation Requirements: Must have activated Crown of Apollo’s Hymns and can only be used after 5+ posts

Ascension: before she found out about her aboriginal power over 5,000 years ago, Kimino was a shy girl that had the beauty and grace of Aphrodite. However, she was sad at the time, for she was an orphan, her parents died in battle and she was an only child. She lived alone, and trained herself to fight like a gladiatrix (rare female gladiator). Her life was peaceful, until one fateful day when an enemy village attacked the city. The attack put her village into a stage of panic, unlike most of the women at her village, she fought with the village arms, and her village was winning. Many enemy warriors retreated and she was caught off guard, Kimino watched the enemy retreat at a near by cliff. Unfortunately, one of the enemy warriors attacked from behind her, their blades connected. Sparks flying everywhere from the contact, yet the man was stronger. The warrior had cut her side open open, the man kicked her in the eviscerated side, and she lost her balance. Kimino fell off the cliff; she closed her eyes and knew it was the end. Her back felt cold, and then extremely hot, then suddenly large white beautiful wings sprang from her back, she opened her eyes and was amazed. She was no longer falling, she laughed in delight and quickly stopped, for she heard something different in her laughter, it sounded gloriously musical. Kimino asked, "What is happening to me?" she said to herself. It did not matter, she had unfinished business to accomplish. She glided up to the edge of the cliff and the enemy warrior gasped in awe. He was awestruck at her beautiful wings, her body to her disgust, and then her face, he fell to his knees and started to give pitiful cries for mercy. She rolled her eyes until the moment he called her beautiful demon of war. She stiffened, she became angry, "don't you dare compare me to a demon!" she snarled to the enemy. Her anger melted to confusion when she noticed that her skin was glowing brilliantly and brightly. Soon then the light faded, she looked up to were the man should have been. She gasped in unadulterated horror when she saw that he had been fried to a crisp. She looked at herself in disgust for she was not normal anymore. She landed on the ground her feet touching the ground ever so lightly. She walked to her village forgetting about her wings. When she got back, the people were back to their normal selves or fixing the minor damages, until she came into view. The people gasped in awe just as the enemy warrior had. She was confused everyone started murmuring to himself or herself that she must be the Daughter of Heaven. Kimino shook her head in frustration, and then she flew off to the river to take a drink. However, when she did she noticed her reflection, and she gasped. Her long, light brown hair turned silver, her sky blue eyes, turned gold, and her pink lips where a bit fuller. She stood up, and noticed that her body looked and felt stronger, more graceful; her skin seemed to give off a light pink glow. She noticed that her cheek was bleeding, she touched it, gave a tear for she had punished a person with godly powers. She touched her cheek again and realized that it was no longer bleeding, she checked her reflection, and there was not a scratch. It was the twilight hour when she returned home to the village. The people who saw her in the morning knelt in respect. She told them that it was not required. They got back up and begged her to stay. To protect them from harms way, and the warring villages who are fighting over land and resources. She finally agreed and the people were happy, many years passed and she realized that she was not aging, or dying, this thought troubled her, but her thought was interrupted by screaming. She summoned up her warrior form. Her silver hair turned into a light-ish blond. Her eyes change into a multitude of different colors whenever she blinks. Her clothes turn into plate armor and her white wings spring from her back and becomes tipped with thorium, giving a light glow to them. She flew to the heart of the village to find an enemy witch killing kimino's people. She glared angrily at the witch her eyes red with rage. She summoned her staff and flew down right in front of the witch. The witch gave her a look of hate, then the witch said, “You killed my only son I saw it through a vision. You will pay the ultimate price." the witch raised her hand and before Kimino had a chance to speak, the witch cast a curse on her. The witch held up a crystal amulet and said, "Until someone with pure intentions breaks this amulet, I banish you into this amulet for eternity!" Kimino felt a pulling sensation she noticed that she was becoming smaller. She screamed in surprise, as she was absorbed into the amulet. Many more years have past she waited. She suddenly felt her spirit being released. She looked around and saw that she was in a temple. She heard a gasp, she looked up and saw a beautiful woman. Kimino knelt, she knew that this woman was a queen. The Queen asked her why she was kneeling. Kimino raised her head and said, “Dearest lady, you have freed me from a curse that has been bestowed on me by a powerful witch. For that I thank you by offering my eternal service." though the queen was confused, she told her to rise. That she was now her protector, Kimino rose and stretched out her wings, she now knew what she had to do, what her powers were for, she smiled at the queen and promised her service forever. Knowing that for eternity, she would protect the queen as long as she lived. The queen said her name was Bara Kusabana the only female Quincy alive. When they walked outside, unexpected Kimino raised her hand toward the sky and then pure light crowned her head. Soon following Kimino’s body turned pure white then silver. The light then drained and created a flying circlet above her head.

Techniques

Name: Crown of Appolo’s Hymns
Effect: Kimino sings of hymn that creates a huge crown of transcending light that forms around Kimino’s head. Every post that the crown of Apollo’s Hymns is up, a surging wave of holy fire spews in front of Kimino, the holy waves can be easily avoided by jumping 40 ft in the air or 40 ft from Kimino.
Duration: 5 posts (5 surge waves)
Cooldown: 4 posts after the surge waves of light stop

Name: Brigid’s gift
Activation Call: I call on life, Brigid, the hand of all life, I heal reject the pains
Effect: Kimino calls on Brigid the goddess of life, and then sends a beam of light at whomever she wants to heal. The gift heals the person for 75% of their injuries, damages, mental damages, and cures afflictions like poisoning, curses, etc.
cooldown: 4 posts

Soul Weapons:
Weapon Name: Serene Lupine Staff – Benediction
Hit effect: places a connection curse on the target.
Connection Curse: Damage the target places on Kimino sends back 25% of it to them

Weapon Name: Ravaged Lupine Staff – Anathema
Hit effect: Every hit that Kimino makes on the enemy heals her for 25% of the damage

Weapon Name: Divine Blade – Consecration
Hit effect: The ground around the target becomes consecrated and burns them

Weapon Name: Divine Blade – Ragnarok
Hit effect: the target becomes 25% stronger but 50% slower and puts a bleed effect on the target
Bleed: continuous bleeding occurs for four posts

Soul Shields:
Shield Name: Devastating Shield – Aries Ribcage
Effect: Increases strength and defense

Shield Name: Death Shield – Hades
Effect: Makes physical attacks place a stigmas on the target
Stigma: The taget gets marked with the symbol of a buckle (shield) and if the target gets hit in the same spot twice = Death, kind of like soi fons attack.

*Will add more if weapons are approved

completed

oops sorry... tons of grammaticles

Okay, several issues with this sheet, issue number one is...

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Ability: when Kimino sings, bright little star-like lights appear surrounding a wounded man/woman it is used to heal wounds,emotional stress,and sickness, if Kimino doesn't want to kill the enemy, but doesn't want to give the enemy any mercy, the lights will surround him/her and it gives them excruciating pain, and agony. the pain lasts for 4 posts.

Huge godmod potential here, if some light just surrounds a person JUST LIKE THAT, they can just be given excruciating pain suddenly, and your healing has no extent at all. Set a limit to them. Cooldowns, charge ups, duration, etc. For now, DENIED.

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Name:Divine Light
Effect:when kimino is angry, her skin glows more brightly not harming her eyes but her enemy's she glows so brightly that the enemy either burns to a crisp or is temporarily blinded.
Duration and/or Cooldown: the blinding lasts for 5 posts.

Either the glass is half full or half empty, pick one, also SET A LIMIT ON THIS POWER. Light can just suddenly pop up and AUTO-BURN someone like that. This technique is PENDING until you address my concern.

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Name:Creation of Light
Effect:Kimino can summon a beautiful silver staff like spear with a sapphire in the middle, it shoots waves of energy to the enemy, one hit can seriously damage the enemy, maybe even fatal if the enemy has very deep gash it might kill the enemy, but if the enemy only has a few cuts it will make the enemy suffer excrutiating pain.
Duration and/or cooldown: the pain lasts for 4 posts

DON'T DEFINE WHAT THE ENEMY GETS. If someone is fifty level above you, obviously this wave of energy can be swatted out of the way. Just say it leaves cuts, and no sudden FATALITIES. For now, this technique is PENDING until my concern is addressed.

Anyways, until you make those changes, your sheet will be DENIED until further notice.

i know thats why its not ready yet...sorry i forgot to edit it, its not complete

fixed, and complete

Allo, Approval peeps

Im finished